Songs I wrote... Let me know what you think...

[Echo419]

Some are pretty dark, and have been modified so I dont get banned from AO :)

http://www.browndotdesign.com/MySpace/Song1.jpg -Piercing Through
Wouldn't It Be Great If You Knew That I Knew All About You
Ending The constant Seeing through, directed towards me from you
We could end hazy barriers between ascertained unification
All this is speculation but, there has to be meaning to why
I sit in confinment echoing the name that chokes me inside
Sliding further away, dwindling in the daylight. Dont let this Die.

[Echo419]

http://www.browndotdesign.com/MySpace/Song2.jpg -Absence
Gone like the breath from my empty lungs, you see
Reoccurring flashbacks of the last thing she said to me
An early morning message, recieved
She was gone, i could not believe.

But Now your gone and what can I do
But face everyday, still loving you.
I wait up every night and pray
that it didnt have to be this way

But it is
And theres not a single thing to do
Except sit here and struggle through
The pain and sorrow of missing you

STOP the serenity ends right here
numb the void of my severed heart with fear
that i'll end it all right now,
this is the year of solitude and fear

if only it didn't have to be this way
if only she had'nt gone away
not it's not going to be okay
this is all too cliche,
let go the first blood of our last day

[Echo419]

http://www.browndotdesign.com/MySpace/Song3.jpg -Return Broken Heart
I can't believe this actually happened
The years of anticipating you and me
all goes down in condescending memory

I only lay now on a bed of tears
It continues to get worse thinking of the years
I wish I could go back
To change the way I used to act
leaving you is my greatest fear

But it did so what do I do?
Relooping the laughs I shared with you
The physical exodus begins today when I go away
But I swear to you, my heart will stay with you

Now I'm gone an I cannot fill the gap
Of you in my arms and the love I lack.
It's clear to me that I must come back!

They say the pain doesnt last this long
But this reality of this living hell proves them wrong
I must come back!

But only in dreams can I return to you it seems
Two more years it will be
Till the power to return is vested in me.
When I return will you promise me
You'll remember me, You'll be there for me, You'll Still Love me?
I Must Come Back!

[Echo419]

http://www.browndotdesign.com/MySpace/Song4.jpg -Venting Mind
Why does it always seem
Seem the world is so unclean,
filled with the scum that breathers
our air. Just to intoxicate it and leave.

You know, I kind of wish you would stay,
but on second thought,
I think of the day, and the way that you say
you wouldnt go away

It's such bull SPIT to hear this from you again.
Pack up your crap, So I wont have to see you again.
Go away so I won't have to live this again.

I'm going through the pictures of you
pulled out my knive when I found one of us two
I cut you out, and burned you, just like you did to me.
Some people cut themselves to tranfer the pain from the hit,
but see with me, don't get your hopes up,
because I dont give a SPIT!

Because roses are red, and violets are blue
go to Hell I bleepin hate you
no better yet: Jump through rusted barbed wire
then strait into the salted sea
and let the salt burn through you heart like fire
just like you did to mine, you bleep liar...
Dont you see...?

[Echo419]

http://www.browndotdesign.com/MySpace/Song5.jpg -Sorrow Minded
We spent three years deciding our fate
alternating our fears of each other
affection arriving
always i wished for you, but always proved other

We're out of time,
I'm out of place.
If only you were mine,
I could see your face.

Sipping away, the pain in vain.
Another year of my life down the drain.
Take me away father, or clear this rain.
So one day I may see the light,
and it shall reign.

In my dreams, I find you waiting there.
Light blue eyes, shielded with blonde hair.
You turn and vanish as I near you,
just as it was way back when.

Why does it seem my desires are such a sin.

We're out of time
there is no more grace
you'll never be mine
line my solitary coffin in lace.

[Echo419]

http://www.browndotdesign.com/MySpace/Song6.jpg -Departure
You make it so much easier to leave this place
You make it so much easier to hate your face
It didn't have to be this way, i swear its true
It didn't have to be this way, but then again it was you

There once was a book titled: "Hate and Distrust"
enscribed with the times and memories of us
You know this book very well
You live by it, you breathe it. You Wrote It.

You loaded your gun with a bullet
Aimed it heart, or my head. I can't remember
I would've ran away, If only I had seen it
You added an extra sheet of ice
to my perception this december.

So I'm packed up and ready to go
I'm battle scared and i'm ready to show
What a BLANK you were, everyone should know

I'm packed up and ready to go
Ready to fight through the rain and show
I've seen the worst, its not that bad anymore
Now that I'm gone and your not here anymore

You make it so much easier to leave this place
You make it so much easier to hate your face
It didn't have to be this way, i swear its true
It didn't have to be this way, but then again it was you

[Echo419]

http://www.browndotdesign.com/MySpace/Song7.jpg -Death In Solitude
Secluded in the darkness of your perills
Lingering in the shadows of typical life's
Hiding in stealth amongst the lamp poles
Lingering in the shadows she smolders and dies

She waited for the one last call to come
A shot of redemption, the one oppurtunity
one oppurtunity one attempt
to veil what has been brought among

In the brief moments she begin to cry
Her life replayed before her eyes
In a second the chamber fills with air
a color so deep so dark now covered her hair
Her life replayed before her eyes
Her life replayed before she dies

[Linkwarner]

I likes song number 2, what is its name? We will have to talk later about it.

[Echo419]

None of them have names yet. never really thought about giving them names.. Thanks for ur compliment. Why are we going to talk about it later?

[SCpoloRicker]

livejournal.com?

You could have linked; assuming you posted it there as well...

[Echo419]

Umm do you mean MySpace? and That was a useless post... you couldve posted that comment in myspace, but u didnt. kthx

[bornl33t]

Umm do you mean MySpace? and That was a useless post... you couldve posted that comment in myspace, but u didnt. kthx

your posts tend to usually be useless and to me it made perfect sence. YOu can distrubute your "art" accrost as many forums as you want without having to copy paste it a hundred times.

Are you emo? You get offended about the dumbest things?

[tony3]

Did you need to make 8 seperate posts?

[hAppy]

Did you need to make 8 seperate posts?
Do you need to ask? Shut up then.

Good job on the songs.

[Echo419]

Thanks hAppy I apreciate it... And i havent posted it on any other forums... I didnt think it would bother you If i posted them on AO... you know if you have such a problem with me you can block it... If you dont have a comment on the songs dont post...

And im guessing all you people that are bieng retarded about this never even took time to read them...

-echo

[MonsterMag]

Man get those looked at my by someone, I think they have potential.
Great Job

[Echo419]

Seriously? Thats cool... I have a friend semi-in a band... he said there effin crazy and wanted to make atleast one into a real song... But then again he just got arrested.

::edit:: thanks for the compliment!

[MayAMonkeyBeYourPinata]

So much anger...

Try mixing up the ryhme scheme or not ryhming at all

Its decent, but when you have 3 ryhming lines in a row it should be broken up.

Good effort though.

[MayAMonkeyBeYourPinata]

And I'm bored so heres something I wrote

Silence

Speak the thoughts you choose to speak
They then will reverberate, and with them the silence will drift away
The thoughts of one, become the thoughts of none
When silence is the utterance of everyone
It takes but one drop to fill a lake
A flood will act the same, but it is a single drop which ends the game
The whisper of silenced injustice spreads like wildfire
Across a forested landscape riddled with arid streams
It burns down their villages and towns to the ground
Where men and woman lay asleep in a prison of their unspoken dreams
The small blue eyed boy next door, burned with scars
Of what they do as he feigns sleep
He lays awake at night and weeps
Soft blond hair drenched in sweat
The damage of his tormented lament
With just one word, a passing remark
The malady would be torn apart
And rain down like a summer sky
In silence, a malignant growth
Will tear his heart apart, and with it
The boy would scream for the first and only time
Injustice lives, when we let it die
It floats into the back of our minds
So let it out, roar when you glimpse
Words of ignorance, ringing out across a sea
Of people who hear only silence, despite the scream
Of an innocent child staring out into the rain

[Echo419]

holy crap pinata... and all the songs up there i actually have a tune for in my head haha... and i do mix up the rhyme scheme alot... well sorta, thanks for the comment

[mcveighr]

Worst rhyming schemes ever.

I like how you rhymed a word with itself several times.

[Echo419]

mcveighr... so ur second comment was sarcasm...?

[SCpoloRicker]

iambic pentameter?

weak STRONG / weak STRONG / weak STRONG / weak STRONG / weak STRONG

DUM da | da DUM | da DUM | da DUM | da DUM
da DUM | da DUM | DUM DUM | da DUM | da DUM
da DUM | da DUM | da DUM | DUM DUM |dada DUM
da DUM | da DUM | DUM DUM | da DUM | da DUM

/serious :cool:

[oneworld]

actually i think these would be pretty tight with some music...

awesome job dude.. keep up the good work

[Echo419]

Thanks for the comments guys... Didnt shakespear write in iambic petameter or how ever u spell iit?

[SCpoloRicker]

Thanks for the comments guys... Didnt shakespear write in iambic petameter or how ever u spell iit?

Yes. A good chunk of "medival" literature, particularly plays and novels, was written this way. I sorta always thought it would be cool lyrically.

[quik]

I wrote a song..

One time I got a stye
Guess where it was? In my eye
It hurt so much it made me cry
Then I got a rope and hung myself, hoping to die.

THE END.

[-Tab]

Thanks for the comments guys... Didnt shakespear write in iambic petameter or how ever u spell iit?


yea he did. those songs do have serious potential. nicely done.

[matmc89]

Tin foil...I felt the need to post in your thread. Are you in a band?

[Echo419]

Thanks WhyDoINeedAUserName... man I wish ao wouldnt of cut out sigs, cus i liked urs i designed lol...

Mat no... but i think i could be... but prolly just backgorund vocalists and song lyrics... unless someone wants to teach me guitar... even tho i have one and no the scales pretty much haha... eleven?

[MayAMonkeyBeYourPinata]

holy crap pinata... and all the songs up there i actually have a tune for in my head haha... and i do mix up the rhyme scheme alot... well sorta, thanks for the comment

Thanks, I think...

[Echo419]

yah dude... there awesome... Thats more poetic IMO... i write some stuff like that, but i dont consider it songs so i dont really type them up as songs... but i can sit in my head and come up with something like that, with no rhyme schemes at all...

Sorta like Jim Morrison when he is describing something, and uses no rhyming but rather highly poetic free verse

[MayAMonkeyBeYourPinata]

I find it much easier to write when you have a tune in your head, alot of times I will steal a simple beat from a song, and use that to shape my writing.

[Echo419]

Thats kinda what mine are... mine are all fast paced... Streetlight Manifesto is where most my tunes come from.

[Jonneh]

Write a song about a happy go lucky duck over the moon because he's just bought the 24 DVD boxset and can't wait to see Jack Bauer torture someone then threaten to kill their loved ones in eye poppingly high sound and picture quality.

[Echo419]

dude I want the 24 DVD Box Set...

[Athius]

They are good but the bad thing is that people will get tired of them since most of them you are crying because a girl left you.

[psychoreaper_666]

i'm really NOT into emo
but some of its pretty good

but seriously did you have to get so worked up over a girl leaving you that you felt the need to write 7 songs about it. I mean really, if your that worked up you need help. life will go on.


BTW black/ thrash metal helps to releive anger better than emo :headbang:

[Echo419]

Hmm... actually not all 7 are about a girl leaving? maybe 3? other are about my leaving her? others are just not about leaving at all?

[Automaggot68]

Umm do you mean MySpace? and That was a useless post... you couldve posted that comment in myspace, but u didnt. kthx

I didn't like them, and i wish you'd stop posting.

Edit: ANGSSSSSSSSSST

[Echo419]

ANOTHER SONG

Today they came to me, and let me know
That it was time for me to go
They said, "Make today well spent, It will be your last.
Time to put this town in the past."

I'm Gone...
No more time with you
I'm Gone...
No more holding you
I'm Gone...
No more endless nights kissing you
I'm Gone...

Tonight I'll go home, sleep, and dream
of my life, empty without you it seems.
Without delay, my dream becomes a nightmare,
Simply without you, out there.

Don't leave me, when I leave you
I will always be there with you
If your with me...

It seems it always happens this way
Find someone you need to love and lean on
Then without fail their taken away

I'm Gone...
No more you
I'm Gone...
No more me
I'm Gone...
No more time spent bieng lonely
I'm Gone...

Tonight I'll go home and I'll wish
That is wasn't our last kiss.
Of all these things I'll be without
your the only one that will figure out
That your the only one i'll miss.

This Morning I... Drove away from this
Dieng inside ever since.
I passed you by on my way
What could I do but cry and wave

It ends this way, It will be our last.
Oh... It ends this way...
Your in my past...