***Need Fast Help on Add!!*****

[TNS2k2]

Well Me And Tom have been working on this for a while, Here is the one i have helped with, more to the way i was thinking.

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[Phil]

How about, "The new X-Mag (SOLD OUT)".

[pito189]

Like that?

[Muzikman]

Ok, I can't let it go....

[AGD]

trying to use smaller pics

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[ben_JD]

Advertisement ERRORS!

I hope that this post makes it to your attention prior to placing the ad.

1) Breech is misspelled

"Breach" is incorrect.

"Breech is correct.

2) Override is misspelled

"Overide" is incorrect.

"Override" [two "Rs"] is correct.


Suggestions, not errors follow:

3) Spell out "Level". Lvl seems rushed.

4) Why is Aluminum capitalized in the "All Aluminum..." bullet point? I think for consistency, you should decapitalize Aluminum.

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Like this?:

- Level 10 anti-chop system
- ACE (Anti-Chop Eye)
- 1 ounce Superbolt
- Removable breech
- Manual override
- Aluminum body
- 2600 pass CnC milling
- All-aluminum RT valve
- Autococker barrel threads
- Adjustable magnetic trigger
- 20 bps semi mode
- Unbreakable on/off switch
- Ultra Light E______ grip frame [what does "E" stand for?]
- 2.7 pounds without barrel

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[AGD]

PREZENTS!!! DOnt post any more come to the chat room!
AGD

[AGD]

smaller x logo with slogan

[shartley]

Originally posted by AGD
smaller x logo with slogan

IMHO... too many X's.

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