"Also there has been lot less injuries in paintball less than tennis, BOWLING and even shown in current studies cheerleading."
I think this is a run on sentence or something, is that worth $3 ???
Seriously, though, maybe the approach here is all wrong.
One of the kids mentioned he was about the same age. Wouldn't a letter sound better coming from that guy's parents as to "why paintball is an acceptable recreational activity for their son"??? Remember, parents used to be kids who tried to talk their parents into activities too! Surely one would be glad to lend a hand.
Just a thought.
I think this is a run on sentence or something, is that worth $3 ???
Seriously, though, maybe the approach here is all wrong.
One of the kids mentioned he was about the same age. Wouldn't a letter sound better coming from that guy's parents as to "why paintball is an acceptable recreational activity for their son"??? Remember, parents used to be kids who tried to talk their parents into activities too! Surely one would be glad to lend a hand.
Just a thought.

next time ill post my good copy but right now im tired and been up since like 6:00 so im gonna lay off the computer a bit. Hey i will admit though that alot of those errors prior to my final copy were stupid, careless mistakes....that i fixed but whatever. And no there are not many run-on sentences just alot of typos. I think and write...not think then write. (just my way)



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