Check Out The Website
yeah the team im on now has a website, but i still have some probs, i need ppl opions. now dustins gun now has a autococker hinge frame on it and brandons gun now has a dallara body on it, and we need a group photo and feild pic. we will be up dateing the pics and there is pouse to be music but its not workin and there one misspelled word...............see it takes for ever to reload the site so i want it to be right when i do it so please post your opions or just changes that would be cool......... thks...................
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Wow, impressive. But the banners at the top should be stretched out a bit more. And get that Mag upgraded
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Brandon's Marker-- should be "dropped"
Dustin's Marker-- "R" in Ricochet should be capitalized. It's a proper noun (Name)
Kyle's Marker-- WDP should be capitalized. Proper noun. (Name). Same for Halo B. "Setup up a lot." I think it should read "I love the setup a lot." Period after hopper, not a comma.
Brian's Marker-- "P" in Piranha should be capitalized. "C" in currently should be capitalized. Remove the "I" before It's and capitalize the "I" in It's. Also capitalize the "I" in "I hope to have." "P" and "E" in Pure Energy should be capitalized.
Josh's Marker-- WGP should be capitalized. "O" in Outcast should be capitalized. And it should be spelled Outkast. Replace period after Outkast with a comma, & "F" in Freak should be capitalized. Should not be "I also got" should be "I also have." "C" in Crossfire should be capitalized. Should be 4500, not 45000.
Tourney Sched-- your formatting is off. The title of the field is wrapping to the second line in front of the phone #.
Bio-- Should spell out South Carolina. Not everybody knows what "sc" is. "G" in Genesis should be capitalized. "Proper noun-name." "Are" should be "Our" for "Our team colors" and "Our team includes." "C" in captain should be capitalized. The guys' last names should be capitalized as well. "C" in "Co-Captain" should be capitalized. Nav button should not be all caps. Should be "Bio" to match all other nav buttons.
Local Field-- Nav button is spelled wrong. Should be "Field." "P" in Psycho Paintball (both of them) should be capitalized. Proper noun/name. "There" should be "their" as in "know their stuff." "a" should be "an" as in "an airball field." "G" in Genesis should be capitalized. Proper noun/name. Put a comma after "Oh yeah" and remove the "and." Correct spelling of the word "field" and capitalize the "J" in June. Might want to update the date as well, as it's almost July.
BTW- You're welcome.
I should charge you for proofreading. 
Last edited by Dayspring; 06-28-2005, 09:02 PM.Comment
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i no about the nav button but since your in to high detail alot its a lot u can't spell it that way............Comment
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Originally posted by Maggot6Wow, impressive. But the banners at the top should be stretched out a bit more. And get that Mag upgraded
well he got the dallara body on it and the x valve now he savin up for devil mag trigger frame............Last edited by overkill8000; 06-28-2005, 12:02 PM.Comment
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Wow a 45000 psi tank... I want one of those! heheComment
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Wow Thanks Didnt See That............Comment
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FYI- I've updated my list.Comment
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Proper grammer dictates that the sentence should read "I love the setup a lot.". It's not one word, but two.Originally posted by Dayspringe-mag 226
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ok now we got all that downn pack any ideas on change like graphics and all............Comment
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Down pack?
The graphics are pretty cool, I have to say. There are some issues with word wrap in the schedule section, with columns out of line, at least on my browser. If I had to change something I would go with a cooler font, but this looks pretty good.
I can't get past the bad grammar and spelling, however. You are turning 18 (according to your profile) so are either a senior or just graduated. You should be able to do better than that. It will be the only thing anybody judges the website on because it is so egregious. Using bad diction, shorthand, slang spelling, and other youth-isms may be acceptable in a chatroom, and on some forums, but for a web page you need to take it up a notch. This may not be a resume, job application, or term paper, but it is your written hand, and reflects on you. I know I wouldn't give it, or anything written that badly, a second look, graphics and coding notwithstanding.Comment
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Originally posted by urbansixDown pack?
The graphics are pretty cool, I have to say. There are some issues with word wrap in the schedule section, with columns out of line, at least on my browser. If I had to change something I would go with a cooler font, but this looks pretty good.
I can't get past the bad grammar and spelling, however. You are turning 18 (according to your profile) so are either a senior or just graduated. You should be able to do better than that. It will be the only thing anybody judges the website on because it is so egregious. Using bad diction, shorthand, slang spelling, and other youth-isms may be acceptable in a chatroom, and on some forums, but for a web page you need to take it up a notch. This may not be a resume, job application, or term paper, but it is your written hand, and reflects on you. I know I wouldn't give it, or anything written that badly, a second look, graphics and coding notwithstanding.
A down pack is very comfy when playing in the winter up in here in snowy Ohio.
I agree with the grammar, you should try and make it look as polished as you can.
My 2 cents.Comment
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yeah i no bout the grammar see the program i use takes for ever to upload it on to the site so when i do it i want everything to be perfect but u guys are a big help.........Comment
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just curious, what resolution on the monitor did you have when you made this?
Others, great work
.... maybe lil large fonts
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Interestingly, my internet explorer wouldn't allow me to see the site at first ... *freewebs.com was in the list of restricted sites. I never put it there but apparently a list was uploaded at some point in the upgrade / patch process (SP2 and all patches current as of this date). Firefox was no problem and IE wasn't once I took it off the list.
Oh yeah, if you're not already doing it it's a good idea to install other browsers and look at the site with different ones. Not all browsers act the same, every once in a while something is displayed differently than with IE.Comment
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